Could anyone edit this motivation letter for student visa in France?
I'm applying for a long term (over six months) student VISA in France and need to write a motivation letter for the French Embassy in my country. I don't know what else to write so will be very glad if you could give me some hints. Thank you very much! "I'm applying for a long term student visa of France. I am working for a German retail company. I enjoy the retail work but would like to gain the French language skill for working in the retail company's office. I also would like to work for a French retail company in my future. There are so many French fashion companies that I am interested to work for. I would like to do marketing, merchandising or buying. I am a complete beginner at French language but I know that it is the best thing to learn the language in the country. I am learning French by myself until the day I leave to France but also I am assuming that nothing is better than learning French in France. I would like you to give me the visa. Thank you. Chris"
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Eh I prettified it a bit, probably still mistakes in it though. One thing I would say is not to start every sentence with 'I' and also not to end a letter with 'GIVE ME THE VISA', it's considered rude. To Whom It May Concern My name is Chris and I am applying for a long term student visa of France. As of now, I am working for a German retail company. I enjoy the retail work but I would also like to gain the French language skill as to further myself in the retail business. My dream is to work for a French retail company in the near future. There are so many French fashion companies that I am interested to work for. Especially marketing, merchandising and buying interest me. My current level skill for French is that of a novice. I have been told that the best way to learn French is immersion, to completely surround myself with French speaking people as to further my skill. I am currently leaning French on my own, until the day I leave for France. However, I would prefer to study French in France as there is no better school than that. Thank you for reviewing my request Chris
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You should probably apply to a school, as they will not accept you without some sort of sponsorship. Wenn Sie richtig sehr gut Deutsch kennen, würde ich auch irgendwo dazu schreiben. ================================================= Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Chris X and I am applying for a long term student visa for France in order to complete my studies in X. (You can tailor it here, such as French language, or French lit classes, etc. I would probably say liek my French studies at ABC Ecole/School.) As of now, I am working for a XXX, a German retail company. I enjoy retail work and heave learnt a great deal from it, such as X skill, Y skill, and Z skill, but I would also like to further my knowledge of the retail industry by gaining further ground as to acquire and refine my French language abilities. My dream is to work for a French retail company in the near future. There are so many French fashion companies that I am interested to work for. Especially marketing, merchandising and buying interest me. My current level skill for French is that of a novice, having studied for X time with various materials and lessons. (Are you a cmplete novice? Have you studied a bit? If so, I would mentioned it and where.) I have been told that the best way to learn a language is total immersion, completely surrounding myself with French speaking people as to further my skill. One of th reasons that I would prefer to study at ABC school is because of the excellent quality of instructors as well as the performance of its graduates. I feel that with ym dedication to learn the language of Rousseau, de Gaulle, and Voltaire, I assure you that I am open to broadening my horizons both linguistically and culturally. Following completion of my language studies, I wish to pursue either an internship in France or a Francophone country, or return to my retail career. Thank you for reviewing my application. Sincerely, Chris
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